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Plot twist that fell flat: my fantasy story's big betrayal moment
I wrote this huge reveal where the main character's best friend was secretly working for the enemy the whole time. Set it up over 15 chapters with little hints and clues. But when I shared it with my writing group in Portland last Thursday, three people said they saw it coming by chapter 5. Guess I made the clues too obvious lol. How do you guys balance foreshadowing without giving away the surprise too early?
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sean_barnes242mo ago
Guess the subtlety was a little too subtle for Portland.
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nina_hall482mo ago
Maybe they were too busy fighting to notice.
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nancy_king292mo ago
Hide your setup in action scenes where readers focus on the fight not the clues.
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